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小词不错哦;有景有情有故事,顺流直下一气呵成无可挑剔。如果格式再正规一点就更完美了。已欣赏过了,给你点赞!
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问好同学,词立意不错,格局脉胳顺畅,题目直接标求雨甚好,娇慢错别字是骄慢,整阕词读来讽刺某些当官的,当下现象,很不错的一首卜算子
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