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不羁的风VS林夕,对句接龙 |
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对句结构不对,出句前二后五,后五主谓结构
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应该是歌声婉转吧,对句最后一字是“歌”,出句人生是偏正,风水是并列,结构不对。出句有人生得意须尽欢的意境,对句表意不是很清晰,与上.....
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出对句都从听觉入笔,转换下会更好,视觉互补或空间互补,后面的出句,后三前四不紧密,忧国忧民,觉得意思已经完整。
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